Places
There are many places I miss
Many places to get a kiss
You set down a place mat
In the wrong place on your cat
Kids told to stay put yet
Can't for there are people to be met
Some say they wanna go
To explore the new snow
I still have no place though
Confusion
She wonders through the darkness
Lost in her own mind
Struggling through the vines
Few thoughts filter past
She sees a way out and
starts to follow a broken path
Mud weighs her down
She can't ecape the depths
Thoughts rushing past
Fears climbing, no, flooding
Fear consumes her as
She refuses to see the truth
Water rising
As she takes her last breath
She see the reflection of
herself
And then it all stops
The chaos is broken, the
frantic cries of survival are gone
and she lifts herself up
She makes her own path
She follows no one but the
Soft beat of what can be
Breaking into the light
She discovers life as it is
She knows. She Lives.
She accepts.
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PLACES
1. The poem is about places(obviously) but about places that mean a lot to you. Like your cats at your house or the bridge that you love, and sledding and having adventures in the snow when you were little.
2. i think that the strongest line is "I still have no place though" because after all those places you had listed you sounded like you really knew where you were and belonged but then the last line was just amazing because it kinda threw me off and i had not expected it.
3. i think you may need to work on the line "you set down a place mat, in the wrong place on your cat." it's a good line but the place's make it a little confusing and you have to read it a couple of times.
Confusion
1. this poem is about a girl confused on how she is suppose to get through things.
2."starts to follow a broken path" that line seems really strong to me because it seems as if her life is that path and her life is broken and thats why she doesn't understand what to do because her life is broken..
3.i think that this all great but something that annoys me is just the line "Fears climbing, no, flooding" but thats like me personally confused so dont take note to it.
4. i like the confusion poem much better because it has so much depth in it and it moves me
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